Okay so I'm doing a homework right now and I have to rewrite the ending to the book "Frankenstein".
I'm going to share what I've written with you all so far so you can see how weird my stories are and give me some opinions on how it sounds because I need to know if I sound like a smart ass. I don't know whether I should keep the DBZ part in though, the teacher might not understand.
Story: Victor approached the monster for his final time, he angrily said to it “You’ve destroyed any bit of hope in my life, your life is nothing but a mere mishap, your time is over you disgrace”. Victor continued to then draw a katana from a pouch attached to his ragged trousers which were now coloured White from the lack of light and the rough terrain they had endured. Frankenstein cracked his head and crunched his knuckles, he then departed his hands from one another and too equipped a katana. He chuckled then roared “Haha, you ain’t got nothing on me, I’ll duel you for your life is over from this moment onwards.” The two ran towards each other like Goku and Piccolo.
I'm going to share what I've written with you all so far so you can see how weird my stories are and give me some opinions on how it sounds because I need to know if I sound like a smart ass. I don't know whether I should keep the DBZ part in though, the teacher might not understand.
Story: Victor approached the monster for his final time, he angrily said to it “You’ve destroyed any bit of hope in my life, your life is nothing but a mere mishap, your time is over you disgrace”. Victor continued to then draw a katana from a pouch attached to his ragged trousers which were now coloured White from the lack of light and the rough terrain they had endured. Frankenstein cracked his head and crunched his knuckles, he then departed his hands from one another and too equipped a katana. He chuckled then roared “Haha, you ain’t got nothing on me, I’ll duel you for your life is over from this moment onwards.” The two ran towards each other like Goku and Piccolo.
