Wrote a song

[Curley]

Hey FK its Curley, i recently finished writing a song i dedicated to american society. Now i dont claim to be good what so ever but i would love any feedback, constructive criticism plz no hate i'd appreciate it thanks.


link to song; http://pastebin.com/LmLh2MuX

 

[Pandas]

Maybe do a video. Cos probs knowing me I'm gunna try and rap it.

EDIT: Try and fix this bit "Hollywood glorifying a fake reality of the hood, seeing all this shit about miley cyrus, two faced bitch, disney star onta twerking and raising the ignorance bar." I'm trying to rap but it doesn't work Try and make it more rhymingy.

 

[Curley]

Maybe do a video. Cos probs knowing me I'm gunna try and rap it.

Would you be willing to rap and record it ?

 

[Jaii]

I like it, if I can see a preview of what the backing track is, I'd be able to figure this shit out and get it slapped gorgeously.

 

[Pandas]

Would you be willing to rap and record it ?

Umm, probs not. I'm a squeaker. I just read stuff into rap. And plus I'm white.

 

[gunnar]

I'd try and rap this for you Dan, lmk on Xbox.

 

[Pandas]

Bump. He needs a singer to sing this for him