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• Feb 9, 2015

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So I just made this quote up last night. But I feel like it could be revised better, can anyone think of anything?

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Hansel said:

My actions and words are something your eyes and ears cannot decipher

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Please Fix The Capitalization Mate, Its Horrid On The Eyes.

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'My actions and words are something your eyes and ears can't comprehend' - try that.

 

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Fuck her right in the pussy. 

Thanks for the grammys. 

 

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Pretty nice, Just fix cap other than that perfect

 

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"You endeavour to analyze my actions and words but you merely touch the surface"
I actually don't know LOL

 

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Too much "and" it messes up the flow.

 

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Magic said:

'My actions and words are something your eyes and ears can't comprehend' - try that.

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That's a better version and looks very professional.

 

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@Random your right
@Hansel go with something more like this, 'My actions are of such royalty that you simply cannot comprehend them' or My actions are something your eyes cannot comprehend.
@Nokia skip to 0:16 [video=youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6w1DsOA-1pM[/video]

 

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My actions and words are something your eyes can't interpret/elucidate.

 

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Naughty said:

My actions and words are something your eyes can't interpret/elucidate.

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A quote doesn't have to have advanced words to make it sound good. And I can't tell if you are saying (in/el) to choose both or just one.

 

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try drinking bleach, this might help the flow.