First UB

[Hurt]

I've been a designer for a while, but I've never made a userbar before. I made this one for @Lyrics and his forum the other day, and want to get some opinions from my FK homies.

Looking for feedback from other great designers I've seen on here @Tempts and @Fury as well as the UB god himself @Astro
Thanks in advance to anyone who leaves feedback! It's much appreciated.

 

[Av8]

tbh it looks like poop i can barely read what it says

 

[Fury]

Pull the text forward so it stats out more
No point having it in there if you cant read it
Overall looks good though for a first

 

[Magic]

Make less cloud and more of the font.

 

[Nab]

The text is in the back, I can see that the text is Lightning though.

 

[Yui]

Looks good my friend!
To improve it you should do something with the text, it's not easily visible.

 

[tattoo]

As others have said you can't really read the text, move it to the front and this ub would look incredible.

 

[Hurt]

Alright, so far I've followed everyones advice and I want to know if you guys think this is any better.

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@Avi8te @Fury @Magic @Awe @Yui @Twelve

 

[Magic]

@Canon its better, but still there is to much cloud, crop quite a bit from the bottom.

 

[tattoo]

Alright, so far I've followed everyones advice and I want to know if you guys think this is any better.

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@Avi8te @Fury @Magic @Awe @Yui @Twelve

That looks alot better but it looks really high on the cloud. Try putting it more down in the center and cover some of the front of the text with clouds to make it look like its "sitting" in the clouds

 

[Fury]

@Canon yes that looks much better

 

[Tempts]

Your revised version is definitely better, but I'm not sure about the text placement, font, nor color.

 

[Yui]

Alright, so far I've followed everyones advice and I want to know if you guys think this is any better.

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@Avi8te @Fury @Magic @Awe @Yui @Twelve

Looks much better, good job man!

 

[Glitter Milk]

I know this is a bit of a different pov, but maybe remove the text completely?
It's clear that there's lightning, it may look a lot more clean if it was just the background.
Not every ub needs to have the group's name in it, and those usually turn out really nice.
(just a suggestion, other than that gg on it being your first)

At least you tried, unlike others.

 

[Nab]

@Canon the dark blue under "ting" and on the cloud needs to be softened.