Essay help

[Tiger]

Can someone just help me with the 1st paragraph this is all I have so far. It has to be on how Human beings are traps. Please if someone could help me, you could reorder the 1st paragraph how you feel it would be better.
"[font='Times New Roman', serif]Human beings are social animals and often interact with each other in many ways. Humans tend to use other people in order to achieve what they want. Humans beings are traps because they want to control your time, emotion and actions."[/font]
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[Random]

I think that @'divinitive' has a homework service, and he's good at it.

 

[Tiger]

I think that @'divinitive' has a homework service, and he's good at it.

Trust me I would but I blew $200 on fucking 2k15. And didn't get a single good Onyx player :'(. I need it done tomorrow next time I have money I am saving $100 just for HW niggas. They the real MVP'

@Megaman THE TRUE MVP!!!! NIGGA CAME IN THE CLUTCH FOR ME!

 

[Crisp]

Do you want the first paragraph edited or do you want more added to it?

 

[Tiger]

Do you want the first paragraph edited or do you want more added to it?

Already got it the 1st paragraph done thanks to @Megaman now time for me to do the other 4 paragraphs. If i need it reviewed can I like PM you. Like I am gonna send it to 3 different people to like review it for me to make sure its good and everything they can make their edits and stuff.

 

[Crisp]

Already got it the 1st paragraph done thanks to @Megaman now time for me to do the other 4 paragraphs. If i need it reviewed can I like PM you. Like I am gonna send it to 3 different people to like review it for me to make sure its good and everything they can make their edits and stuff.

Sure thing. I'm in 12 Grade AP Literature so Im not bad at writing. 

 

[Tiger]

Sure thing. I'm in 12 Grade AP Literature so Im not bad at writing. 

Dam i'm in 12 Grade British Literature lol.

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@shock @shift @Divinitive anyone who is good are writing you guys think this is good.
"Time is a precious commodity that must not be wasted because we cannot gain that time back no matter how little the time is. Human beings tend to waste people’s time just because they enjoy doing it or simply because they have nothing better to do. Last week in a article, a lady played a prank on someone just because she was bored and ended up wasting his entire day trying to do what the lady wanted. He ended up missing work because of the woman. Not only did she waste his time she also wasted her time doing something as useless and pointless as that."


Corrections addings are welcomed please.

 

[Crisp]

Dam i'm in 12 Grade British Literature lol.

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@shock @shift @Divinitive anyone who is good are writing you guys think this is good.
"Time is a precious commodity that must not be wasted because we cannot gain that time back no matter how little the time is. Human beings tend to waste people’s time just because they enjoy doing it or simply because they have nothing better to do. Last week in a article, a lady played a prank on someone just because she was bored and ended up wasting his entire day trying to do what the lady wanted. He ended up missing work because of the woman. Not only did she waste his time she also wasted her time doing something as useless and pointless as that."


Corrections addings are welcomed please.

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I edited it a little. 
"Time is a precious commodity that must not be wasted because we cannot have lost time back no matter how miniscule. Human beings tend to misuse people’s time just because they think it's funny or simply because they have nothing better to do. Last week I came across an article about a woman that played a prank on someone just because she had nothing going on and she threw away the man's entire day. He ended up missing work because of the childish prank. Not only did she kill his day she also wasted her time doing something as unnecessary and pointless as pranking."

 

[Tiger]

I edited it a little. 
"Time is a precious commodity that must not be wasted because we cannot have lost time back no matter how miniscule. Human beings tend to misuse people’s time just because they think it's funny or simply because they have nothing better to do. Last week I came across an article about a woman that played a prank on someone just because she had nothing going on and she threw away the man's entire day. He ended up missing work because of the childish prank. Not only did she kill his day she also wasted her time doing something as unnecessary and pointless as pranking."

Took your suggestions and @megaman compared them both and his literally took the fucking cake. Yours would good too way better than mine but I don't think kill should be used in there.

 

[Crisp]

Took your suggestions and @megaman compared them both and his literally took the fucking cake. Yours would good too way better than mine but I don't think kill should be used in there.

Alright. If you need any more help lmk. 

 

[Divinitive]

Already got it the 1st paragraph done thanks to @Megaman now time for me to do the other 4 paragraphs. If i need it reviewed can I like PM you. Like I am gonna send it to 3 different people to like review it for me to make sure its good and everything they can make their edits and stuff.

You can send me it if you'd like too, i'll help you out for free this once . I wrote like 3 college level essays for @Gr33d and I wrote multiple essays for @Fade and many other users.

 

[Tiger]

You can send me it if you'd like too, i'll help you out for free this once . I wrote like 3 college level essays for @GrƷƷd and I wrote multiple essays for @Fade and many other users.

Can I like send you paragraphs of what I type and then you edit and add things onto it? Just finished he 3rd paragraph now so like need it looked over and edited if possible

 

[Divinitive]

Can I like send you paragraphs of what I type and then you edit and add things onto it? Just finished he 3rd paragraph now so like need it looked over and edited if possible

I suppose I could do that for you yeah =/

Edit: I do not usually work free, but for this once I will only because I'm not busy at all