That's pretty good. It doesn't sound poorly put together like most peoples songs in this genre.
The only thing I could think to possibly make this a little better, which I could be wrong so it's really just an opinion, after it pauses and says "I'm... Dreamin", possibly make it hit bass hard? I don't know if that's just me or what but I feel like it'd make me want to have a rave to this song.
All criticism aside, that's pretty good man. A whole hell of a lot better than I could ever possibly do. Keep it up man, you're good at this stuff.