Its kinda hard to critisize a rap when you don't have the beat, or you don't know the flow of the rapper but I put this together in about 5 minutes, (I usually spend about 2 days on one rap nowadays)
Contains 18+ words, proceed with caution.
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I'm going to leave this beat partly exposed,
cuz i want all the money cars and the clothes
I did what i could i suppose
but now im doin more then what i chose
listen to these rhymes and the way they flow
slicker then the pussy of any of dem hoez
I'm makin a livin while you clean my flows
even martha stewart is dissapointed in your cornrows
now lets move on to what im abotu to say
that all you haters are about to pay
it was your turn now its my day
im leavin you homos lookin like ya fuckin shea
yea thats right, i called him fuckin gay
i dont talk to him anymore kay?
my name is not his its gillay :)
so lots stop talkin about shea boogay
ill be makin millions all day n night
I just listened to god and went into the light
no not the one you when you bout to die
this is the one you see when your high
i guess im about to say goodbye
to the old gilly and meet the new fry
he looks like a fresh clean guy
he acts really cool and hes pretty fly
the way he rhymes is actually kinda scary
and yea he popped your girlfriends cherry
he ate her out like shortcake, strawberry
oh yeah and dont forget the whip cream
dairy
it was actually kinda hairy
no offence you guys im just not a fairy
my visions kinda gettin blurry
this is the beginning of a new day
im takin over this world no matter what you faggets say
ill get through this and take out every mutha fucka in my way
this is the first solo spit from the king gillay
oh yeah and by the way, I fuckin hate shea Boogay
Lets not bring him up anymore,
i got rid of him like a pimp does his whores
Backhanded him with my pimp hand strong
he was just jealous of how my dick was long
and thats the end of the song
i hope you enjoyed it cuz the old gilly is long gone